Start of a Dramatic monologue with an unreliable narrator

Lilly looks up to the stars, gazing through the open window.She contemplates her deepest thoughts,she is sat slouching on the window ledge.


Its a cage,bars with gaps to narrow for me to seep through.
My life is out there not in here. I'm trapped.
They say 'unfortunately you'll have to stay in a few more weeks'.
They haven't found anything, i can tell.
The nurse make their snide comments as they walk away.
'She's an attention seeker' 'A liar!',
The doctors tell me its a 'figment of my imagination',
I know somethings wrong, it is, it is, it must be.

We class people as normal, but what is normality, who is normal, what is all the people considered normal, are all people with lots of similarities normal?, how do we class these people.
My mother and Father visit, on special occasion.
NONE of them believe my illness(tone of voice changes)

You see to me its simple, my mind tells me things,nasty things, i try so very hard to ignore them but they linger, and cloud my judgements and decisions.

How to write about yourself with examples:

 

Firstly forget your writing about yourself let your creative juices flow, I found this difficult because I care a lot about how people view me which made me cautious of what to write and how to come across, and forget modesty.

Secondly what are your hobbies, for example one of my biggest hobbies is going to the gym, and you could try and add humour into your hobbies and include previous bad or good experiences, if I try to be funny it will be terrible so I won’t enforce that upon you.

Thirdly you can talk about your personality, pick three points on the positive and negative sides of your persona, for example I am friendly and happy and smiley but can be very load (and messy as I’m sure many teenagers are)

Next you can include what makes you individual and different from everyone else, because everyone’s different at the end of the day.

First or third person?

Example: third-

Esme is a helpful, friendly girl who expresses herself through music; she goes to the gym to get rid of pressure and anger and enjoys the fitness boost. She can be quiet and load dependant on the mood she is in however she is a genuine person and would do anything for anyone. Esme often enjoys horse riding but finds parting with her bed early in the morning extremely difficult.

Example: first-

Im a creative person who likes to make things, I learn visually and by doing things myself with pointers, when I started my job I found it very hard because a lot of the information and important training were based on the computer which didn’t suit my learning style, until I started being practical I felt I knew hardly anything. Im often very adventurous and like to visit new places and do new activities.

So looking at the given examples you can see that whether you write in third or first person it doesn’t make a huge difference, it all depends on what suits you better, its best you’re comfortable and then it’s easier to express yourself with purpose and meaning.

 

Lastly go and try it out! Only you will know if it feels right or not so have a go.

My Idiolect

My Idiolect consits of a mixture of words and phrases unique to me, which have been influenced by people around me and my enviorment.Despite being brought up in bristol my accent isnt that strong however lotsof fillers such as 'like' and 'um' have ended up persistant members of my vocabulary, I use these to elongate converdsations and allow thinking time.I occasionaly use the phrase 'do you know what i mean?', I believe I use this to check that the person i have been talkingto was paying attention and because im seeking a response it confirms the presence of their consious brain.

I also believe that social networking sites have a huge role in how our idiolect develops, such as slang that is often used over text and instant message crops up in what we say. The abreviation 'LOL' sometimes comes up when I talk, because its a very common abreviation often people use it as a word when they are talking.

My body language which is also part of my idiolect is once again a developed part of me and has been shaped by outter figures such as my family.I often use very open body language however sometimes especially when I am tired my body langauge changes to almost the opposite.

I use the word 'slider' which i thought was a real word however after looking into the word i have realised it is not an actual word and has been adapted by the harsh 'r' sond that is used by the bristolian accent.